I'm normally confident giving levels but would love to know what people make of this. Year 4 boy asked to write story about a couple in love in an exploding volcano scenario. Sorry, but I've added the hyphens and commas as on first viewing it just didn't make sense. However boy read it through and I added them as I could hear what he meant. However, without the extra punctuation, what would you give it? Hearts broken, love lost in lava and eyelids filled with dreadful tears - this is a story of Jane and Max a couple that were afraid to show their love. (Inside them was a shining, beaming darting white tulip spreading through the air as Jane was picking all the love from a branch.). Jane who was a volcanologist spreaded the love again as they sat down on the grass galncing over the water whilst seeing two attractiveful swans gancing back at them making a shadow of a heart whilst Jane and Max were having a picnic. Suddenly not knowing what to expect there was a huge explosion wiping out the whole town. Jane had no fear. Neither did Max. Suddenly Jane who was pretty according to Max got surrounded by an enormous rock. Max thought to himself - do it for the girl that you care about- as the Rocky song was rebounding over and over in his head. Jane was bulging her words out as Max pulled up the rock Jane was fine in the endbut Jane took the rong step and another rock tipped. Max ran a nd pushed her out like a survivor. Jane was in teaers... Max was dead.