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Should a personal statement be written in the first or third person?

Discussion in 'Career clinic' started by MsPeaks1, Mar 7, 2016.

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  1. MsPeaks1

    MsPeaks1 New commenter

    I am applying for a job for the first time in four years and feeling rather like a fish out of water! Ideally, I am looking for a part-time English teaching post in an independent school in Bristol (I have primary and secondary teaching experience and qualified 10 years ago).

    Having had a look at a few example CVs, I was firstly surprised to see that personal statement paragraphs are written in the third person. Is this correct?

    Secondly, the example letters of application I have seen seem to involve an awful lot of trumpet blowing to sell the candidates' skills - far more than I would feel comfortable with personally. Am I terribly out of touch or have I simply seen the offerings of some very confident individuals?

    All advice gratefully received.

    Thank you.
     
  2. TheoGriff

    TheoGriff Star commenter

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    I reckon you have seen some U.S. examples.

    ;)

    And what you call a personal statement is one of those ghastly mission statements at the top of a CV.

    A high-flying teacher looking to increase her experience in a new environment.

    ;)

    Question. Why are you looking at example CVs? Have you specifically been asked to send one? Because since the Statutory Guidance says that schools should not ask for them, most don't.

    Question. Why are you looking at example letters of application? Could be dangerous. . . You could unwittingly copy bits that stuck in your mind, and have your application rejected.:(

    Sharing letters of application, supporting statements and executive summaries


    Question. Have you read the applications advice in the Professional Advice Hub?

    Why you shouldn't look at non-specialist sites for job application advice

    Letter of application for a teaching job

    Why you should always include an E.S. in an application

    There are loads more . . .

    Way to go!

    Best wishes

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  3. MsPeaks1

    MsPeaks1 New commenter

    Thank you so much for your response.
    Absolutely - 'those ghastly mission statements' is correct!
    The reason I've looked at CVs is because I'm updating mine with the intention of sending it to schools in the area to see if they have anything available. I thought I ought to make sure CVs of today are, at the very least, covering the same areas as mine is and then came across lots of third person speak and trumpet blowing supporting letters!
    To be honest, I think they were all produced by dayjob.com, the addresses were made up UK ones.

    You are right however, this is a dangerous business to get into. I should most likely have faith in my own skills as they have got me where I am today.

    I shall take a look in the Professional Advice hub.

    Thanks again :)
     
  4. TheoGriff

    TheoGriff Star commenter

  5. MsPeaks1

    MsPeaks1 New commenter

    Thank you - first time posting here. Noted :)
     
  6. MsPeaks1

    MsPeaks1 New commenter

    I'm really struggling as to how to change my name here! It's my first time posting. Can you advise? Thank you
     
  7. And100

    And100 New commenter

    If you go to the 'Workplace Dilemmas Forum' and look at the post named 'Useful tips for posting on this forum' it tells you how to change your name.
    Good luck :)
     
  8. TheoGriff

    TheoGriff Star commenter

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    If you have got your own name here as your username, you can e-mail

    TES.Community@tesglobal.com

    and ask them to change it. You will need to tell them which new username you would like. Check that it's not already in use by starting a new Conversation and starting to type the name in the To box.

    Best wishes

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  9. MsPeaks1

    MsPeaks1 New commenter

    Thank you both, I have emailed and I hope by tomorrow I too can be rather more anonymous!
    Not that I have anything to hide but it pays to be sensible.
    Good night :)
     
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  10. Piranha

    Piranha Star commenter

    I blush with shame. While being made redundant, I was sent to an "outplacement consultant" who told me to put stuff like this on my CV. I found a copy of what I wrote at the time, and it looks appalling; I am too embarrassed to share any of it. It still helped me get a good job, though.
     
  11. TheoGriff

    TheoGriff Star commenter

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    Here are some gems:

    This candidate brings operational and strategic management skills, alongside experience in transformation initiatives including school improvement and start-up expertise within organisations.

    She has knowledge and experience of admin and strategic development in school improvement, as well as specialist expertise in managing and inspiring success, achievement in education, developing stakeholder success and introduction of new curricula


    :D

    I particularly love admin next to all the long words. And what does it all mean? What does it all mean, eh?

    Best wishes

    P.S. Feel free to copy these examples, they'll do you no good anyway. :)

    Sharing letters of application, supporting statements and executive summaries

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  12. MsPeaks1

    MsPeaks1 New commenter

    OK, I just wanted to check in to say how helpful your articles have been in clearing things up for me. Firstly, it seems that I am on the right track doing what I always have done which is writing honestly without flowering things up. I felt concerned that maybe things had changed and that everyone is doing this nowadays which would be a nightmare!
    Secondly, the info about Executive Summaries is incredibly useful - I had never even heard of an ES until reading this!
    All I need now is some part-time positions I can apply for. In the meantime I will get my CV sorted out and write to schools in the area in case they have anything available - I don't suppose you have any handy links on doing this? Essentially I guess, as with all applications, it's about tailoring it to the individual school.

    Thank you for your help.

    PS I emailed and changed my name although it hasn't changed on this thread for some reason. Hopefully all good from now on though.
     
  13. sparkleghirl

    sparkleghirl Star commenter

    I think looking at sample CVs and letters online is very useful. Yes, you must be careful not to unwittingly plagiarise but for those of us who are not used to blowing our own trumpets it's very helpful to get an idea both of the content and of the tone required.

    I used them for guidance when preparing my first applications; now I tend to just adapt them as I go along but it was helpful websites offering samples that got me started.

    But yes, US versions are cringeworthy.
     
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  14. TheoGriff

    TheoGriff Star commenter

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    Try this:


    Your TES user profile gives you the option to change the name that you wish to be displayed on the site.

    In the top right-hand corner of the screen you should see your username. Click on your username and drop-down menu will appear. You need to click on the Your Profile Page link to open your TES user profile.


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    Click on the Edit my profile button:

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    You should see the option to change the name displayed, if you want to change it. Then click exit edit mode.


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    Best wishes

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  15. MsPeaks1

    MsPeaks1 New commenter

    Thanks. I emailed the help team earlier who said, 'Please allow up to 24hrs for username changes to update in the TES Forums' which explains. I did the change you suggest also so all should be well. :)
     
  16. TheoGriff

    TheoGriff Star commenter

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    I have been very careful not to either tag you nor quote you, to ensure that your current name doesn't stay on the thread.

    Best wishes

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  17. Middlemarch

    Middlemarch Star commenter

    Just to say that you can send speculative letters by all means, but it's most unlikely that a head will - at this point in the year - say "Let's not bother advertising this post to attract a good field, let's just take this person we haven't seen..."
     
  18. MsPeaks1

    MsPeaks1 New commenter

    I am sure you're right but worth a shot. Otherwise it's agencies I guess...
     
  19. Middlemarch

    Middlemarch Star commenter

    No - you look for the job ads and apply for them.
     
  20. MsPeaks1

    MsPeaks1 New commenter

    In the absence of any suitable job ads in the area I feel that doing something is better than doing nothing...essential in fact!
     

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