I'm an NQT in a year 5/6 and we have been working on narrative writing during last half-term. I found out about a short story-writing competition hosted by BBC radio 2 and thought it would be a good opportunity for the children to practice their skills. The story must be less than 500 words and be original. I have marked their writing over the half term and there isn't one that I consider worthy of entry into this competition. Some of the children have used some good similes, adjectives, speech and 'show-not-tell' in their stories and have used interesting openers and complex sentences, but my problem is that I seem to have a class full of children who cannot think of an original idea that does not involve zombies, aliens, ghosts, travelling through portals into other worlds/time frames(Narnia). Neither can they develop these into a story structure with a build-up, problem, resolution, etc, although they have done lots of work on this. My other problem now is how to feed this back. As a school we use a stars and wish marking policy and so I do always praise the good features of their writing as well as giving pointers for improvement. However, I did some marking while the stories were under construction and my feedback to one boy that he'd used too much dialogue so that his story resembled a playscript and not a narrative was met with 'That's offensive'. Any advice gratefully received.