Hi all, I'm hoping someone will be able to help. This piece of writing is based on a traditional tale - Cinderella. The pupil was asked to plan and write an alternative version of Cinderella making it more modern. This is the end of unit piece of writing. Year 2. I am struggling with AF5 and AF2 I will type is out as the pupil has written it. Thanks in advance. Once there lived a pretty girl called Holly and she lives with her ugly unkle cobie. Wen she was whatching telly an advert with Justin bebar. When ugly unkle cobie hered he said "you are not going unles I like him." Then wen he was going out to see LMfao and do lots of fumy dansing. When Holly's unkle lefst and Holly chide. When Holly sloped cRieng a magical fairy godmother came. Next the fairy godmother said " I will help you dont chie" she said "I will help you make a nise dress". I will make you a dress ans some nise shiney shoues and cane you get me a mouse and I will tern it into a butifull and of she went to the Ballarina Partie and she saw Justin Bebar. they dansed until mid Night and she ran oute! When she ran out. then Justin Biber said "dont run stay with me!" But she codent. Becasue the magic will were of. Then her sparkling Butiful Butterfly slippers turned into sloppy pumps and when she was bakc home there was a knok at the dore then here ugley unkle Cobie opend the dore and it was Justin Beber and ugle unkle Cobie sead what are you hear fore he said. Justin said " I am hear for tring shose on Laddeys". and he tride it on Holly and it fitted and they went on a honney moon and they got married and the lived happley ever after. the end.